tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post3643591993845072749..comments2023-11-30T10:14:32.373-05:00Comments on Susan Cross Writes : Three points for the Devil -- #fridayflashSusan Crosshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-20506669899551196422009-10-12T15:29:16.474-04:002009-10-12T15:29:16.474-04:00I see how this could easily be a longer piece. Gre...I see how this could easily be a longer piece. Great job in editing it down, and still having it feel complete.trevhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10930957143736509429noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-87919918891922026922009-10-11T21:43:07.499-04:002009-10-11T21:43:07.499-04:00As they say, the devil is in the details. Thanks f...As they say, the devil is in the details. Thanks for reading.Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-10702327552787295752009-10-11T21:07:38.577-04:002009-10-11T21:07:38.577-04:00Do we ever consider the devil in our deals? Nicely...Do we ever consider the devil in our deals? Nicely done!~Timhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06774944172261988587noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-59754430775169555332009-10-11T10:58:17.734-04:002009-10-11T10:58:17.734-04:00Ego is the driving force.Ego is the driving force.Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-25578081090616922922009-10-11T10:42:04.896-04:002009-10-11T10:42:04.896-04:00Hmm. Why would George only suspect Randy? Don reve...Hmm. Why would George only suspect Randy? Don revealed what bad things he did. <br /><br />I liked the dialogue.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-34616898452536107902009-10-11T10:18:35.736-04:002009-10-11T10:18:35.736-04:00Good ending - I like how the devil can have your s...Good ending - I like how the devil can have your soul, yet you can carry on leading a normal and happy life; no fire and brimstone - at least not just yet. Evil is a very human thing! Nice story!mazzz_in_Leedshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01498100483681096442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-77962567857574584222009-10-11T10:18:25.571-04:002009-10-11T10:18:25.571-04:00This is a great story, so it's weird that I ha...This is a great story, so it's weird that I have a strong dislike for all of your characters (with the exception of Don's wife). It totally works though.<br /><br />The question is: Who do I like the least? The answer: I am not really sure :-)<br />I enjoyed it!<br />~2Tomara Armstronghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17185889402088565686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-7824904343530192692009-10-11T07:41:40.881-04:002009-10-11T07:41:40.881-04:00I loved the ending - especially the idea that peop...I loved the ending - especially the idea that people can go through life not knowing they've sold their souls to the devil.David Mastershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12809185582216906363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-36397111488222571872009-10-09T12:25:21.128-04:002009-10-09T12:25:21.128-04:00Lovely piece with a great ending. It did cross my ...Lovely piece with a great ending. It did cross my mind halfway through that perhaps Don was being conned by Elaine and George but I prefer your ending :-)Clive Martynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15057496284523957955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-61391300811387486432009-10-09T10:17:43.165-04:002009-10-09T10:17:43.165-04:00Upon rereading, seems like Elaine held all the car...Upon rereading, seems like Elaine held all the cards. Thanks for stopping by.Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-87483805311987203972009-10-09T10:08:56.198-04:002009-10-09T10:08:56.198-04:00I forgot to say...I expected the last line to say ...I forgot to say...I expected the last line to say "And life seemed good"<br /><br />Since the story described that arc...glossing sins and temptations and bad choices over with that thin veneer of seeming. <br /><br />:0)Karen from Mentorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03685540761526680384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-87679937321306974452009-10-09T09:50:30.270-04:002009-10-09T09:50:30.270-04:00I thought it was interesting that the deal settles...I thought it was interesting that the deal settles the lives of four people..and in the middle of the night..[when wicked things are traditionally done]....but only two of the parties discuss the terms. Greed and reputation, securtiy and power are heady things... it's hard to tell who was the most greedy and who was the most powerful in the adult threesome. I felt bad for the baby. And I agree with Jon... the deal with the devil will blacken the souls of all involved.<br />Good flash.<br /><br />Karen :0)Karen from Mentorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03685540761526680384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-3438986901593155372009-10-09T08:53:34.014-04:002009-10-09T08:53:34.014-04:00I hope he doesn't turn out like "Rosemary...I hope he doesn't turn out like "Rosemary's Baby." (Unintentional reference to Roman Polanski there.)Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-8525659596807680472009-10-09T08:52:09.510-04:002009-10-09T08:52:09.510-04:00You never know. Nice to be called lucid for a chan...You never know. Nice to be called lucid for a change.Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-12526044492737892482009-10-08T22:09:17.071-04:002009-10-08T22:09:17.071-04:00What a wicked web you have woven for us Susan. Poo...What a wicked web you have woven for us Susan. Poor Randy.Lily Mulhollandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09804113718224654006noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-4262174889107972502009-10-08T22:01:36.807-04:002009-10-08T22:01:36.807-04:00Super story about one of my fave topics - integrit...Super story about one of my fave topics - integrity. I feel for the kid, but with all that bad blood, maybe he'll trump them all... Peace, LindaLindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-50077686219800020682009-10-08T21:18:14.118-04:002009-10-08T21:18:14.118-04:00What a story. It's frightening because you thi...What a story. It's frightening because you think this could be your neighbor, your boss, your brother ... you (hey, not me; I admit nothing -- I swear, I've never even seen Elaine naked!). <br /><br />Very lucid storytelling, meaning I didn't get lost. That's a good thing. Because I get lost a lot.<br /><br />Jeff PoseyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-78613474498624446502009-10-08T19:33:29.510-04:002009-10-08T19:33:29.510-04:00People can be so deviant. It's so much easier ...People can be so deviant. It's so much easier not to be.Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-48237496646313047742009-10-08T18:37:01.874-04:002009-10-08T18:37:01.874-04:00I like this piece Susan. Especially:
"George...I like this piece Susan. Especially:<br />"George thought he had Don's eyes but nobody noticed." <br /> We see what we want to see. Nicely done.<br />~chrisChris Chartrandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09766438158698041660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-1854536999652443052009-10-08T17:12:50.581-04:002009-10-08T17:12:50.581-04:00Happy smiles on the surface. Deceit in the heart. ...Happy smiles on the surface. Deceit in the heart. Elaine would eventually blackmail for more. Those kinda ladies always do. Poor Randy.Jodi MacArthurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13373591664178281529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-19434423988127890112009-10-08T16:35:13.007-04:002009-10-08T16:35:13.007-04:00Jon, I commented too fast on your post. Randy was ...Jon, I commented too fast on your post. Randy was in the innocent one but he would never know unless he grew horns at puberty!Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-33662068487716301602009-10-08T16:19:16.403-04:002009-10-08T16:19:16.403-04:00Thanks! When I wrote it last night (in the middle ...Thanks! When I wrote it last night (in the middle of the night) it was a longer piece. I had to really edit it to make it flash. I think stories under 1000 words get the point across better so I'm glad you liked it.Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-76812579324859347822009-10-08T16:10:29.665-04:002009-10-08T16:10:29.665-04:00Well done. I was glad to read through the clarity...Well done. I was glad to read through the clarity that many writers seem to miss.C. A. Beninatihttp://www.cbeninati.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-36521817071966865602009-10-08T15:49:07.803-04:002009-10-08T15:49:07.803-04:00Oh, Jon, if you only knew. Randy could have said n...Oh, Jon, if you only knew. Randy could have said no. They were equally greedy and selfish. Don't ask me how I know.Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-497169516087803680.post-2187258292946276652009-10-08T15:23:17.742-04:002009-10-08T15:23:17.742-04:00I hope you meant that in a good way. Had to add a ...I hope you meant that in a good way. Had to add a little Halloween reference. Thanks for stopping by.Susan Crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05076064230626935030noreply@blogger.com